Adam W.

5/5 - Would Lose Myself to the Void Again

Revisado: 01-26-25

Great world building, pacing and character development. Coupled by a solid production and narration, Outstanding overall.

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Edgelord Fantasy

Revisado: 07-26-24

While the performance was solid and the writing better than most in this genre, the story overall is still cringy.

It's full of convient skill acquisition, a main character who is overpowered 1/3 of the way into the book and incredibly wooden supporting characters.

A great Fantasy title can immerse you immediately through world building and the ability of some authors create protagonists who we connect with in someway... unfortunately this book does neither.

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This needs work

Revisado: 09-23-22

While I believe the premise was approaching original for this genre, the execution was very poor.

There were a ton of repeated words, misused idioms and pacing problems. It felt really rushed and all of the characters were hollow and lacking in any real personality.

The "system" was especially flawed as the rewards and power levels were poorly thought-out and completely unbalanced.

I'm pretty disappointed considering that Jake's Magical Market was charming and had a lot of promise.

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Bravo!

Revisado: 06-30-22

It was well written, paced and narrated. I can't wait for the entry to this series!

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Another Middling LitRPG Series

Revisado: 11-27-19

It's difficult to suspend disblief when the writing feels so stunted. The over use of metaphor and comparison hurts dialogue between characters that already lack any real depth.

The MC comments on several occasions that the NPCs are so much like people that she can't tell the difference but you're constantly reminded of the game mechanics driving their overall goals and again making them feel like two dimensional characters.

I understand a slow start to world building, but usually that comes with more character development or actual conflict.

Overall, I'm disappointed at how boring the first entry to series ended up. I was hoping for a new set of books to dig into but this will likely be it for me.

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Limited character growth & unbelievable dialogue

Revisado: 10-04-19

I'll start with stating that the narration was good, and likely only hampered by mostly awkward dialogue between characters.

Attempting to muscle through this series leads me to book 4 & it's likely where I'll stop as I've seen very limited character growth, poorly executed world building and cringey writing throughout. Even while attempting to suspend my feelings of disbelief, the characters are flat and unrealistic.

I don't typically have an issue with profanity but it's overuse by Montana in an attempt to either fill out the dialogue or maybe humanize him just had the effect of making him sound unintelligent.
The yo-yo of dialogue from proper to conversational between characters established as nobility & their staff is again highly confusing and hurts the immersion further.

The relationship between Nikolai & Montana is unrealistic & needs a ton of work.

Honestly I could go on and on but I understand that Eric is a new author so I'll leave it at this, stop trying to fill out an entire book based only on the limited narrative goals you've set. It's clear by the title of each book what the character is going to do & it feels like you're stretching a small amount of plot points until the book gets to the end leaving the reader to feel like not a lot has been achieved.

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