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Between Two Teammates
- "Straight" Student Sucks: Straight to Gay First Time MM Best Friend Turned Hot and Sexy Kinky Love Romance Relationship Mate Spanking ... Sucks 101 Random College Encounters, Book 5
- De: Kendrick Onné
- Narrado por: Mark Champagne
- Duración: 21 m
- Versión completa
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General4 out of 5 stars 4
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Narración:4.5 out of 5 stars 4
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Historia4 out of 5 stars 4
After playing the semi-final in our Lacrosse league, we throw a big party at the clubhouse. As I smoke a cigarette outside, I discover the coach and his secret romance by the light of the moon. Back at the motel, I discover my teammate has a secret of his own; but do I want to come (literally) between him and his boyfriend, or will he join in?
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2 out of 5 stars
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I've heard better
- De Amazon Customer en 11-12-23
- Between Two Teammates
- "Straight" Student Sucks: Straight to Gay First Time MM Best Friend Turned Hot and Sexy Kinky Love Romance Relationship Mate Spanking ... Sucks 101 Random College Encounters, Book 5
- De: Kendrick Onné
- Narrado por: Mark Champagne
I've heard better
Revisado: 11-12-23
meandering story, not focused narrative. Continuity errors abound. Yeah sure, it's fiction but good fiction, especially erotic fiction, should be somewhat believable.
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Severe Spankings Are Best for Tom
- De: Mark Maguire
- Narrado por: Saul Jones
- Duración: 3 h y 20 m
- Versión completa
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General4.5 out of 5 stars 5
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Narración:5 out of 5 stars 5
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Historia4 out of 5 stars 5
When handsome, new shop assistant Tom is rude and obnoxious to a valued customer, he discovers the painful way to learn to be polite - through the indignity of hard, regular spankings and canings applied to his upturned bare bottom. The irate customer, Mr. Parkinson, is expert at severe and humiliating corporal punishment for misbehaving adults. It’s so embarrassing, and it hurts so much - but soon, Tom’s fear and dread of the cane turns to acceptance, and finally a real craving for more and more imaginative discipline, which his new master is only too keen to give.
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5 out of 5 stars
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Excellent Introduction to the M/M Spanking Fetish
- De Kindle Customer en 09-17-19
- Severe Spankings Are Best for Tom
- De: Mark Maguire
- Narrado por: Saul Jones
Technically competent but NOT successful fiction
Revisado: 11-02-23
This review is for the audio book so, first of all, the performance was excellent. The narrator, Saul Jones, read with clarity and style. He excelled at making the characters different and enjoyable. Also, the writing was clear and direct. Those items are both five star. My only issue is minor: the chapter stops didn't happen at logical, change points in the story. The chapter changes in the middle of the session for no reason.
Of course, this is only my opinion and I admit my bias straight up. I have the, how shall I put this, 'christian' view about spanking in that it is better to give than to receive. Absolutely I value men who have the need to submit and enjoy reading (and watching) when they do. Reading fiction about it should be exciting and entertaining. If I wanted a lecture or dissertation, I would have paid for a scholarly article.
The work doesn't succeed as fiction for three reasons.
1) The parts of the story that were actually story were enjoyable. I liked reading about the embarrassment, pain, and humiliation Tom went through. Problem was, there wasn't enough of it. Mr. Parkinson, and pretty much every other character, spent far too much time lecturing, providing tedious history and excruciating details about style and technique. All that pendantic verbiage killed the narrative momentum. I fell in love with the 30-sec skip ahead function to get through those parts - and there a LOT of them. Much too much exposition and info dump and not enough story
2) The book is short for a supposedly full-length work. In the intro, Tom describes what he did in a five year period, what he learned and how discipline helped him mature. That's great but the book proper only covered three sessions, a period of about three weeks. There was no real beginning, middle and end. The book began and Tom was punished three times and the book ends. Each of those sessions was described in tedious detail. The way it ended sounds like it's setting up a sequel which I think is a cheat because so much of the extant story was padding. This wasn't good value for the money, .I won't be following the story. Five years is 60 months or about 240 weeks. This book covered just over 1% of the story. At that rate, I couldn't afford either the cost or wasted time for all of it. It shouldn't be a saga.
3) There were unresolved plot holes. These may be related to the threat of a sequel. Supporting characters appeared once or twice, made interesting comments and then disappeared. Mario taunts Tom before Tom's first punishment and shows up at the session (major cliche) but disappears. The author sets up a potential dramatic situation but it falls off the page. The colonel is only in one session but that's relief because he's pervy old creep. Neal shows up when Mr. Parkinson recruits him to validate Tom's description of his sore ass a few days after the session. Then, sight unseen, Mr. Parkinson invites Neal to accompany Tom and participate in Tom's additional punishments. While Neal is spanking Tom the second time, Tom says he'll do anything to get it to stop. Absolutely anything. This from a straight guy being spanked by his gay flatmate. What a fiction hook! But it goes nowhere, Same with the description of chastity which leads nowhere. What happens next? Nothing. Tom thanks Mr. Parkinson and goes home. The end. If there hadn't been so much wasted time on lectures and Mr. Parkinson's useless digressions, there could have been more story. Mr. Parkinson is a pompous old bore, None of the characters are worth knowing in real life - except maybe Tom over my knee!
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