Kyle J. Dore

Narration Chapter for Jonathan was hilarious

Revisado: 03-19-25

When I first read this series I was convinced it was gonna be a dirty vice for me, most LitRPG books are not great and I listen to them as a grungy vice to fill my time.

This series has been an incredible surprise, great storytelling and comedy that’s perfectly woven together with both levity and heavy topics. I didn’t even see the chapter name at first for the chapter dedicated to the narrator Jonathan.

This chapter was incredibly funny, it broke the fourth wall in the perfect way. I enjoyed listening to Jonathan weave through the ridiculous and sadistic assortment of different accents. Even before I read the title of the chapter I could tell exactly what you were doing and it was done in such a way that I fell in love with the playful writing style.

You are an amazing writer and I actually felt bad for Jonathan and knowing how long it probably took him to complete that chapter. That sort of playful teasing is the cornerstone of people who are happy in life, I appreciate it more than you know.

Thank you to both you and Jonathan for delivering one of my new favorite series. I can highly appreciate your lack of pop culture/political family guy references I’ve seen in other LitRPGs (it ruins most books for me). Most of your earth references are minor and straight forward. Maybe a bit silly, but again I’ve seen this ruin other series (He Who Fights With Monsters is an example of obscure pop culture references and political commentary ruining a series) even when you do bring up political commentary it’s done in a very “who am I to judge/ what do I know” sort of way. Very well done.

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Only bad rating I’ve given you

Revisado: 03-16-25

I’ve loved your series a lot. I hate this entry in the series. Besides the merfolk stuff feeling forced and too fast, Julia has also gone from an enjoyable character with development into a condescending idiot who is completely oblivious to the VERY OBVIOUS NON-SECRET THAT JIM IS THE MAYOR…this has been your worst work. You shouldn’t jump the shark and start turning your characters into annoying stereotypes, it’s lazy writing.

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Great series…But…

Revisado: 12-10-22

Hello Davis, I started following your series a while back and have been purchasing them all at a prodigious rate. I love your books and the stories within. I love how plots overlap and you include good foreshadowing.

I have one complaint, really only one. You build incredibly romantic and attractive loving relationships between people and I love it. Williams love life, however, has been so dragged out at this point that I’m actually rooting for both characters ending up alone and miserable hahaha.

In books there seems to be two problems with romantic pacing. Either people are fully in love and committed too quickly or too slowly. There is a threshold where the average person will be thinking “Sh*t or get off the pot”. Unlike in some of your other books where there are cultural restrictions preventing relationships, in this one most side characters are just as annoyed as I am by it.

I think your romantic pacing would be greatly fixed by having less flimsy reasons for them to not pursue one another. I just don’t believe that two young people who are madly in love and encouraged by others to date each other are somehow resisting that push.

In many stories writers will give their characters plot armor…you give your characters’ “Single Status” plot armor. Not a large complaint overall considering how much I love your books, but dear god man I’m tired of hearing about their love with nothing happening.

Anyway, thank you for the great books and stories my dude!

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Egotist Author

Revisado: 11-11-22

“This book is a lot like a gated community, except it’s filled with garbage”

The author eagerly points out social justice opinions while creating a protagonist who embodies the opposite. Maybe if you spent less time virtue signaling you’d realize your MCs political stances are not backed up by his actions at all. I appreciated that you at least attempted to point this out in previous books, but the constant political overtones feel so forced in this book.

The truth is that at MOST you could say Jason is an egalitarian. He’s not a socialist. He’s not a social Justice warlock. This is not my opinion, this is objectively how you’ve written him.

I’d also like to make a comment about how you’ve teased that Sophie is his love interest for many books. I’m not finished this book yet, but if you seriously don’t do anything with all that hinting I’m going to drop this series for wasting my time with fake foreshadowing.

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Study Human Relationships

Revisado: 08-17-22

B.T. Narro is a great writer who is constantly brought low by his lack of knowledge of the laws of attraction. There is a reason why Bad A** super stars like Cliv don’t exist in real life. They can’t. The relationship between Cliv and his BFF would not exist outside of fiction.

Study relationships and the laws of attraction, my suspense of disbelief is struggling to follow this without saying “not realistic”. The way Cliv finds love in the first book was already hard enough to believe as anything more than lustful desire. Book 1.5 is more realistic(if a bit strange due to circumstance), though the time frame should have been longer than a couple days.

Naturally this entire book (book 2) is very far from the reality of love and desire. It wouldn’t have been so bad had you not made the entire book revolving around relationships and then failed to deliver on believable situations.

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Someone needs to have a serious talk with Author

Revisado: 07-17-22

MC almost dies and barely survives fight. Demi-God villain team rockets away like a 1980s cartoon villain after failing again. Sound familiar? Yeah I bet it does after this book series.

Making a constant chain of crappy events that consistently puts MC and friends at a disadvantage while I’m forced to listen to the constant prattling of the most annoying antagonist I’ve ever had to hear is like nails on chalkboard.

Oh and before I forget, having the villain or one of his new sidekicks (the guy literally always has some new, previously unknown, amazing sorcerer mortal sidekick) almost be killed 25-30 times only to have him be spared by MC getting blindsided from the side is not creative writing. Honestly how many times can you have a sword descending on someone’s throat only to have victory ripped from their hands at the last possible second allowing the villains to barely survive. Idk if the writer thinks this is some kinda subversion of expectation or thrilling moment, but it’s so predictable at this point that I’m actually surprised when someone “important” dies. Idk how you can write such a unique and intriguing story and then completely botch the delivery to such a point that I spend most of your book annoyed at you (yes I am literally annoyed at the actual writer).

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Best Full Review

Revisado: 07-16-22

After reading some of the other reviews, I decided to do a full breakdown of this series so far:

Plot: I find that the progress of the this book, including the last few books, seems to be progressing at a decent speed. Not too fast or slow, with the right sprinkling of action throughout. That being said, it does sometimes feel anachronistic with MCs attitude towards ages of marriage and the idea that a “Severe Punishment” was losing 2 hours of sleep for 10 days. There also seems to be little consequence for treason and disobedience. I find this especially inconsistent as there are times where the author hyper focused on severe consequences. It’s like watching TV and constantly flipping the channel between ICarly and Game of Thrones.
Ignoring the previous inconsistencies, I actually like the plot progression overall and general theme.

Antagonist: Kill him. Honestly if I have to see the MC and Friends fall for one more completely obvious trap and barely escape I’m going to go fall on MC’s sword myself. Also the method of your main characters just constantly being held down is just annoying at this point. Your antagonist sucks and it’s stressing me out that he literally reminds me of Team Rocket from a kids show.

Romance: Contrary to other comments, I am not going to be as harsh with this. MC does sometimes look like a Beta, but overall I actually like the pacing of romance. I’m also okay with the relationship budding with witch girl, but it feels forced comparatively at this point. If this were real life more people in the group would be showing more interest in him tho. I’d like to actually see him reject some of these people and not go running away while things just kinda happen to him tho. He’s a forward guy who tells off kings, let’s actually see that displayed in his drive with his heart.

Overall: Kill the antagonist. I’m not joking when I say my entertainment value is -10 when he’s fighting MC. He’s annoying and hatable. You’ve done a really good job selling the audience on how he sucks and needs to eat lead, so let’s see it already. I don’t read books so I can constantly see the MC almost die every time as he gets pinned down by the most annoying villain Demi-god I’ve ever seen so some other idiot can come up and try to stab him while he struggled against his bonds. You have to be bored writing literally the same scene over and over again while MC being a wizard seems to be like 1/10th the power of literally any random hobo who just happened to become a Dark Mage. If you were to remove MCs wizard powers (supposedly one of the strongest) you’d only lose 5% of his power. Basically all of his advantages come from Healing (not a wizard power) and sword fighting (also not a wizard power). Yet I’m supposed to believe he’s somehow a superior rare class? You did good with the healing, but your use of the wizard class is boring if you don’t do more with it.

Despite what it may seem, I actually really have been enjoying these books. These comments are just what I view as obvious and detrimental towards making these good books into great books. Plus it’s easy to fix all the problems mentioned.

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Fun and New

Revisado: 11-18-21

Very good change of pace from the typical pacing. I like the sci-fi elements of this series. I will say there are wayyyy too many references to pop culture, musicians, and movies. This isn’t family guy, don’t overdo it.

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Addictive

Revisado: 09-25-18

The story is always the right balance of epic, emotion, and comedy. All characters have depth and are relatable.

John Lee has a soothing voice that only intensifies the experience of the story. His tonality, inflections, and voice acting portray the characters in such a way that perfectly fits every character.

Finding this series quite by accident and having it released on audiobook was one of the best uses of my money ever. If you haven’t listened yet and consider yourself a light hearted down to earth human, spend the money it is worth it.

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