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terrible writing

Revisado: 06-08-24

Great story, very badly written. Narrator it's on point but he can't help that the writer doesn't seem to understand past and present tense. He does this every other paragraph; "Henry sat down in the seat. He jumps up suddenly and grabs my hand. He ran down the street."

No. This is one of the basics of writing and the "author" falls at it miserably. In a way, it gives me hope. I mean, they'll obviously publish anything these days. 0/10 would not recommend.

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meh story immature characters

Revisado: 05-11-24

Yes, I know the characters are high schoolers, but there's something about inexperienced characters growing into the people they are that can be exciting to read. This ain't that. It isn't just that the dialogue is pure grade A cringe (and therefore probably 100% accurate to at least some highschoolers) it's that it lacks emotional content. People could die? let's talk about magic bacon. or wheat. or bread. or manure for farming.

This is as I said aside from the dialog which is bad. Eris constantly physically abusing the mc, characters constantly teasing the mc, the mc not showing any planning or real forethought when it comes to survival or fighting... this is a mid YA novel except... there are two fight scenes in the book. One against an incubus, one against the minotaurs. Every other page besides those is filled with cringe dialog and dull exposition about base building.

Narration was good but he didn't have the best material to work with. passing on the next book.

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Abby sucks

Revisado: 02-16-24

She goes from literally not caring if strangers die, as in, she states in her own head "why should I risk my lives for strangers?" and constantly advocates for leaving innocent people to die to the undead to suddenly and without ANY warning from the story deciding that she cares about innocent people. This also means that when she flips in her mind Zeke is now a demon possessed pychopath who she betrays and whom she must now defeat or some crap.

Way to subvert expectations. FFS if you are going to write a character like this at least back it up in the story. Almost none of her previous actions or thoughts or dialogues lead her to this betrayal naturally. THERE IS A REASON YOUR READERS HATE THE CHARACTER DUDE. It feels like she is an unnatural insert. Like a reverse Mary Sue. I sincerely hope she can either be changed or deleted from the story because in this book especially she is a nonsense character.If she's a big part of the next book Im actually just done, which is a shame because there is a lot of good in this series otherwise.

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emotionally unstable boring main character

Revisado: 01-26-24

Struggling to finish this. Jake is an emotionally unstable person with no real goals or feelings except for anger and schadenfraude. great performance as usual but it cant save the story. Jake started out as a no nonsense hero who was ruthless to those who try to murder him. He almost became interesting when that ruthlessness had the opportunity to extend to those who would harm his friends and family but the author decided to make those people overpowered as well. so now everyone has cheat codes and that's boring. That ruthless dynamic also fails to deliver when Jake is functionally unkillable and every other similarly leveled person is not only weak, but incompetent and downright stupid.

Jake himself also is not smart. He uses brute force instead of cunning or planning constantly and it's boring. His "fight" with Aaron (Erin?) the immortal has no stakes and Jake doesn't even once try and ignore the enemy or outsmart him and go for the prize in a serious way, so the whole encounter becomes exposition taking about mana and essenses and BORING.

Add to that how needlessly brutal he is when his "rage" takes over. "Jake just really didn't like being called a slave." Well, Jake, the irony should be obvious considering your emotions completely control you and you fail to confront that one glaring flaw at all ever.

Or maybe he does in the second half but it's been 4+ books so far and I'm fed up gangway through this one so I'm not holding out hope.

No stakes. No flaws. He's a walking natural disaster tromping through a kids playground while insisting that "might makes right" while protected by the best plot armor ever made and weilding the best Mary Sue weapons and abilities that could be dreamed up in a fanfic forum.

I think I'm done with Zogarth if this is all they can do.

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good story annoying writing

Revisado: 12-12-23

no spoilers. jake is a fun character. the story is simple enough but has enough hooks to keep me interested. the "game" parts aren't too crunchy. narration as normal is superb. my only main complaint are the CONSTANT crutches the author uses in writing; AKA using "AKA" a lot. "AKA" is short for "also known as" not "in other words" and once you notice the author using the term, you'll never not notice it again.

if you are writing on a touch screen or in short- hand quickly, using acronyms is useful and worthwhile. but when it is a novel (even a trashy fun isekai novel) using them all the time is lazy. using them all the time incorrectly is downright infuriating. still dig the series but man i hope the author stops using that crutch in future.

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abby needs to go

Revisado: 09-17-23

selfish manipulative and broken, but somehow being zeke's surrogate mom as well. she physically abuses him like she's one of the guys, then constantly brow- beats him and openly disrespects him in front of their friends. she gets what she wants (power) and STILL feels inadequate, and to top it all off, despite it having been something like a decade, she constantly (internally and otherwise) compares zeke to her dead abusive husband.

i hate every scene she is in. i dislike her morals. i dislike her principles. i dislike her attitude and arrogance. i dislike that she is the opposite of vulnerable while at the same time not opting to be stoic and just endure her suffering heroically. she whines in every scene she is in, she's unreasonable and unforgiving, and she is wholly incompatible with zeke as a character, even though the author seems to want us to think they have "chemistry."

its actually making me have second hand disgust for zeke as well for being a whiney, wishywashy, weak male instead of the stoic no-nonsense ball of controlled violence he was in the first book. he was the leader in the first book. he took suggestions but he was the one forging the path. now the camp mom is the MC and zeke is sidelined so he can instead internally monologue about his regrets and trauma constantly.

heroes don't dwell. they overcome. this series is turning into trash because every character is being bogged down by themselves. ill grab the last book but if its as much of a slog as this one, ill be done with this author because this kind of teen emotional drama simply is not made for me.

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A masterpiece

Revisado: 08-21-23

And the narrator was superb. Don't dither, buy this book and enjoy. Wait and hope.

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Performance A+, MC is unbearable

Revisado: 06-02-23

Jason in the very beginning is miserable. He stumbles into bed in his Bazinga Darth Vader boxers after playing video games so long he is close to passing out. He wonders if anyone will even miss him.

So at first, he's interesting. He has a goal. He now has a purpose in this NEW WORLD.

So what does our little atheist and global citizen do once he's in this new world and finally not about to be eaten by literal cannibals? Why the only thing that makes sense to a guy who was once so privileged to have no direction in life; try to turn that new world into his old one and complain about literally every part that makes it different except the magic.

His connection with the locals was great. His love of food is fun (but it's also food humor, and that's pretty typical of shallow filler writing). His fight with a monster and his magic powers are interesting.

But then he starts healing the poor for free of every disease, becomes an athiest activist Jesus, and the author's reasoning for any normal mages wouldn't do this themselves is.... the church of the healer is bad because religion is bad.

They even have currency they use in the story that can't be regulated. As in it is fundamentally impossible for the people of the world to set a distinct price because people like Jason who produce their own currency by questing are frequent enough to be a known quantity and accounted for, but somehow are legal and not dealt with even though it would play havoc on the economy.

This book is dumb. The MC is dumb, and the Goddess of knowledge didn't even defend her own world when she was speaking to Jason. She really could have torn him a new one, humbled the little activist, and turned him into a sympathetic character. Instead, I was just waiting for him to throw soup on a priceless painting and glue his hands to a wall.

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Meh

Revisado: 05-26-23

Narrator good, story's a slog. The MC also makes a lot of basic mistakes in his battle direction, like ignoring two opponents who are destroying each other instead of wiping them both out at once. But the plot needs to happen, so he doesn't go in for the kill.

In fact, the rules of how things work are changed for this very reason,and not by the GCD but by the author. At one point, the enemy is set to be caught in a heavy pincer between a single hardpoint and a dozen smaller satellite points, but the enemy has ONE orbital strike. It would have been interesting to see how Hugh would take sacrificing one platoon out of ten, or seeing how the enemy was smart enough to let the trickling troops gather in a clump, but instead suddenly the enemy can "split" the orbital among dozens of targets. Somehow. When they didn't do that the first time.

So that the plot can happen. Meh.

The MOBA/dungeon crawler part of the book was pretty good. Again, Hugh is far too passive to be a good leader either on or above the field, but the pacing was a lot more fun, and there felt like there were actual stakes in that section, so I enjoyed it more.

This one made me question whether my memory of liking the other books in the series was correct, tbh.

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Spoilers

Revisado: 05-03-23

The story does not end well. This is in terms of skill of writing on the level of the first few seasons of game of thrones. In terms of performance, he is the best narrator I've yet heard.

In terms of a satisfying ending, this is season 8 of GOT all over again. All your favorites are dead, or crazy, or enslaved, a cripple runs things, and all hope is basically utterly lost. Is it believable? Yes. Is it brilliant? Yes. It was also an incredible disappointment and a slog to get through the last several chapters.

I read and listen to have a break from the horrors and weight of life. Say one thing for Ambercrombe; say he's a depressing bastard.

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